Jakob, I enjoyed reading this paper and found it to be very thought provoking, your thesis is very relevant to how people act but it's also not an obvious statement someone would make. The idea of people distracting themselves is closely related to Andy's "Bread and Circus" lecture, except instead of the government distracting us we choose to distract ourselves. I think it'd be interesting to compare how we as humans distracted ourselves before the creation of digital media and how we distract ourselves now, this way you can be able to say in your paper that digitalization is the cause of this passiveness and not just entertainment (which has existed for thousands of years and is experienced by animals as well who have no idea how to use a computer). Great paper so far, I'm anxious to see what the final product will be like
Beatrice
Like Andy said, you're taking on a lot of different problems, your paper will be more organized if you look at one problem and create a thesis based on that, or find one specific factor of digital technology that causes a multitude of problems. Great intro though, very engaging and dramatic if you make the rest of your paper as strong as this intro it'll be that much better. As for the stress just relax and gather your thoughts, good luck with your paper.
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